Comments on: (13.2) Study Hall

By: Drew Daniels

Drew Daniels — Thu, 05 Mar 2009 19:19:39 +0000

Thanks for all the comments guys, it’s good to be back behind the wheel and writing again.

As for Regina and her modern-sounding script, I’ve edited the story a bit to reflect that Belial was correct, and James is translating it from Italian.

Also, thanks for the typos Sarah, I fixeded those too. ^_^

By: Belial

Belial — Tue, 03 Mar 2009 08:48:21 +0000

Well, considering that an immortal may or may not be limited by the flow of time (for example, angels in my fiction world aren’t), it does not surprise me that the writing is modern.

That, or it could have been translated for the benefit of younger generations.

By: srsuleski

srsuleski — Fri, 27 Feb 2009 21:20:32 +0000

Sweet! An update!

Intrigued by Regina. Love the timeline… though one little niggle. The writing is clearly modern all the way from the beginning, which just seems a little odd when it’s all together in one place like that.

Some typos for your editing pleasure:

“After a few minutes or aimless clicking”

or -> of

“This is a potential problem, but I’m remain hopeful.”

I’m -> I

By: daymon

daymon — Wed, 25 Feb 2009 20:48:41 +0000

Yep Angel can almost burn a hole in your head with just her eyes. And now she knows that James in their head quarters, I think she is going to tear into security for that.

By: RC

RC — Wed, 25 Feb 2009 15:24:49 +0000

Glad to see more. I love the story so far and I have missed the updates. Thank you for your work.